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Q - Which one do you choose? A - Liberty Q - Why do you choose liberty as more important? A - bc/ it is the right to own one's natural rights( written by John Locke), in other words, what one has to do to survive is one's natural right (Dec of Independence). It also gives people the right to achieve (Freedom of the Slaves - a Northern view), and

Your opening needs to answer the question, but it must address equality and you need to explain (show) why liberty is more important than equality (in "theoretical terms"...like what you've said...liberty is about your own rights to achieve where equality is about everyone being similar and no one has the potential to rise above or even go below his peers...

then follow with a thesis that indicates that there are numerous examples from course content to illustrate the importance of liberty in America..

Q - What is one example from course content that you will reference, SPECIFICALLY, to prove that liberty is more important? A - The writing of the Declaration of Independence Q - Being as specific as possible, what significant evidence from your answer above will you provide AND analyze that liberty is more important (think 'who', 'what', 'when', 'where', and 'why' of it all)? A - It was the breaking away from GB. what were the root causes for the drafting of such a strong, liberty-infused document? examples: GB's Writ of Assistance ( a blank search warrant), the Stamp Act, the Intolerable & Quebec Acts - our right to liberty being squashed led to the drafting of the Declaration of Independence. Make sure you write what each Act was all about...don't just name drop, but provide a clear understanding of each Act. Q - HOW DOES THIS EXAMPLE SUPPORT YOUR THESIS?

Q - What is another example from course content that you will reference, SPECIFICALLY, to prove that liberty is more important? A - Freedom of the Slaves from the Northern point of view Q - Evidence to support this example: A - Lincoln & the Constitution---insures the right to pursue happiness, the Emancipation Proclamation (removed slavery in the North) Q - HOW DOES THIS EXAMPLE SUPPORT YOUR THESIS?

Q - What is your third example from course content that you will reference, SPECIFICALLY, to prove that liberty is more important? A - Q - Evidence to support this example: A - Q - HOW DOES THIS EXAMPLE SUPPORT YOUR THESIS? +A Thesis: it is the right to own one's natural rights( written by John Locke), in other words, what one has to do to survive is one's natural right (Dec of Independence). It also gives people the right to achieve (Freedom of the Slaves - a Northern view), and (add third topic). Liberty is about your own rights to achieve where equality is about everyone being similar and no one has the potential to rise above or even go below his peers. In American history there are numerous examples to prove this for instance the Deceleration of Independence, Freedom of slaves, and (add third topic). The writing of the Declaration of Independence is one of the strongest examples of liberty in American history. The second Continental Congress wrote this document because they were tired of being oppressed by their mother country Great Britain. Great Britain was laying down all these acts such as the stamp act. To explain the stamp act you need to know about the French and Indian War. This war is fought between Great Britain, and the French who is teamed up with the American Indian forces. Great Britain won. Due to this war Great Britain ran up a huge debt and had to pay it off so they placed the Stamp Act on American colonies, even though we did not take part in the war. This act required all legal documents permits, commercial contracts, newspapers, wills, and playing cards in the colonies to carry a tax stamp. The colonists were very upset by this they wanted the same liberties as the English men back in Great Britain. Unfortunately Great Britain did not give them the same liberties such as taxation with representation. To continue America then had the Intolerable Acts, 3 of the five acts were issued in direct response to the [|Boston Tea Party]. The first Act inside the Intolerable act was the Boston Port Act; it was in response to the Boston tea party. Great Britain closed down Boston’s port until Boston paid for all the tea they destroyed. The port remained closed for a long time and many people starved and died. Civilians liberties was not being upheld, a group of people did a action yet the entire colony is held at punishment. The next act inside the Intolerable was the Massachusetts Government Act. Under the terms of the Government Act, almost all positions in the colonial government were to be appointed by the governor or the king. The act also severely limited the activities of [|town meetings] in Massachusetts. Now Great Britain is taking away American Government, which now Britain now has control of American society. Americans in Massachusetts did not have the right to meet in town meetings or achieve any thing in politics. The third act that impacted American liberties was the Administration of Justice act. This allows a governor(by this time the governor is appointed by the king) move accused royal officials to another colony or even back home in Great Britain, if the official could not get a fair trial in Massachusetts. This killed justice and liberty because when the trials got moved very few Americans could afford to leave to go testify in a trail.

Although both liberty and equality are vital to our nation, which of the two do you think is more important and why?
Q - Which one do you choose? A - Liberty Q - Why do you choose liberty as more important? A - bc/ it is the right to own one's natural rights( written by John Locke), in other words, what one has to do to survive is one's natural right (Dec of Independence). It also gives people the right to achieve (Freedom of the Slaves - a Northern view), and

Your opening needs to answer the question, but it must address equality and you need to explain (show) why liberty is more important than equality (in "theoretical terms"...like what you've said...liberty is about your own rights to achieve where equality is about everyone being similar and no one has the potential to rise above or even go below his peers...

then follow with a thesis that indicates that there are numerous examples from course content to illustrate the importance of liberty in America..

Q - What is one example from course content that you will reference, SPECIFICALLY, to prove that liberty is more important? A - The writing of the Declaration of Independence Q - Being as specific as possible, what significant evidence from your answer above will you provide AND analyze that liberty is more important (think 'who', 'what', 'when', 'where', and 'why' of it all)? A - It was the breaking away from GB. what were the root causes for the drafting of such a strong, liberty-infused document? examples: GB's Writ of Assistance ( a blank search warrant), the Stamp Act, the Intolerable & Quebec Acts - our right to liberty being squashed led to the drafting of the Declaration of Independence. Make sure you write what each Act was all about...don't just name drop, but provide a clear understanding of each Act. Q - HOW DOES THIS EXAMPLE SUPPORT YOUR THESIS?

Q - What is another example from course content that you will reference, SPECIFICALLY, to prove that liberty is more important? A - Freedom of the Slaves from the Northern point of view Q - Evidence to support this example: A - Lincoln & the Constitution---insures the right to pursue happiness, the Emancipation Proclamation (removed slavery in the North) Q - HOW DOES THIS EXAMPLE SUPPORT YOUR THESIS?

Q - What is your third example from course content that you will reference, SPECIFICALLY, to prove that liberty is more important? A - Q - Evidence to support this example: A - Q - HOW DOES THIS EXAMPLE SUPPORT YOUR THESIS? A -

Agenda - Thursday, January 10, 2008

 * "Comma Again?" - a review of our favorite punctuation
 * It's Elemental: Studying six focal areas of writing:
 * Double talk
 * Unnecessary words
 * Words that feel left out
 * Weak words
 * Misplaced Modifiers
 * Parallel Construction
 * Work on the above
 * 'You gotta know when to hold 'em, know when to fold 'em'
 * when to 'amp up' writing and when to 'keep it simple'

The Best Podcast Ever! Mr. Rodoff & Dylan talk pencils:
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Agenda - Thursday, December 13, 2007

 * Punctuation! Rules & Practice
 * [|commas]
 * [|conjunctions!]
 * [|semicolons]
 * [|apostrophes]
 * Transitional Devices
 * [|learn 'em], love 'em, start using 'em!
 * let's underline some transitions! let's ask, 'how are they operating as transitions?'
 * Your Ketchup Dispensing Belly Button
 * Reading, Discussing, and Revising
 * Homework (yes, some more homework and all done on Zoho):
 * Revise the opening!
 * Fix all punctuation!
 * Focus on you, the author...not Timmy!


 * FINISH PACKET!

Agenda - Thursday, December 6, 2007

 * Your writing process:
 * Writing is...
 * When I write I...
 * Watch Mr. Rodoff juggle, but watch for the point!
 * Writing Workshop Slide deck (instruction & discussion)
 * Evaluating Opening Sentences document (activity & discussion)
 * [|Designing Effective Sentences] (instruction, online activity, & discussion)
 * Writing an Opening Paragraph (instruction and activity)
 * Next Meeting: ?
 * Homework (yes, some homework and all done on [|Zoho Writer])
 * [|Me Write Better] - write an opening paragraph for one of the generated prompts
 * Write an opening paragraph in response to the following prompt: //Would you rather have a ketchup-dispensing belly button or a pencil-sharpening nose?//

Areas that can benefit from improvement:
//**Online Resources:**// __Organization__ __Verbs__ __Word Choice__ __Creativity__
 * [|Introductions] - UNC's writing workshop
 * [|Writing Fix: Organization]
 * [|Designing effective sentences] - Paradigm Online Writing Assistant
 * [|Transitions] - UNC's writing workshop
 * [|Passive Voice] - UNC's writing workshop
 * [|More w/ passive constructions] - Paradigm Online Writing Assistant
 * [|Verb Tenses] - Purdue's OWL
 * [|All about word choice] - UNC's writing workshop
 * [|Be Your Shoes]

Additional Resources
[|Developing Writers]: A Guide for High School (Teachers) - but students can learn just as much from watching!